I've been having a lot of thoughts
Head is heavy and full of rocks
I'm overwhelmed by one night stands
I reach for her with dirty hands
and slurr-ed speech that cannot tell
her I'm afraid but I mean well
Put out the effort
or not
Find the effort to tell her
she's hot, and
she'll never get the
cold side of the cot
My heart is a swamp
I'm a rotten floating log
It's you that I want
Come and live in my bog
My skin burns with scorn
I need all of you; all
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Mon Feb 18, 2008 1:57 pm
Beth
Joined: 01 Jan 2008
Posts: 336
Location: Michigan
Well that is very different and original - nice rhythm and movement
very nicely written poem. It kind of gives the feeling of a country song
Hugs,
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Tue Feb 19, 2008 1:36 am
desert-fish
Joined: 13 Apr 2006
Posts: 2777
Location: deleted
Echoes beth....I like the flow of that...feels like it just came out of your head that way...
nice poem "bones"
Wed Feb 20, 2008 10:32 am
Rosebud
Joined: 24 Jul 2007
Posts: 164
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Wed Feb 20, 2008 2:53 pm
Ladybones
Joined: 18 Feb 2008
Posts: 7
Whoo! Debut! That went well. Thanks ladies.
Rose, you're absolutely right haha. She certainly does.
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