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All Water Under The Bridge

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sparklyindigo



Joined: 08 Oct 2006
Posts: 32
All Water Under The Bridge

I remember the time that I first laid eyes on you
you were so beautiful
I'll never forget that incredible image
that you burned into my brain
I can still see it very clearly
in my mind's eye
and I don't want to.....
can't let it go

But it's all water under the bridge.....

I remember the first time you came to my apartment
The place that I had so painstakingly prepared for your arrival
We sat together on opposite couches when you didn’t know that I knew that you were stariing at me
And I was loving it
Loving it because even then I knew that I loved you

But it’s all water under the bridge…..

I remember our first kiss
The kiss that goes down in history
The kiss that blows your mind
The kiss that both lingered yet was almost savage in its urgency
The kiss that can’t be duplicated
The kiss that’s gone forever
I miss it

But its all water under the bridge…..

I remember the initial lust we both had for each other
Couldn’t get enough of each other
Couldn’t keep our hands off of each other
Sometimes so intense neither of us could ever tell
When we crossed the line from lust to love and back again
I want it back
My god how I miss it
What have I done?

But it’s all water under the bridge….

I remember a lot of laughter
Times spent together cuddling on the couch
Not ever wanting to be away from each other for too long
I remember the intimacy, the closeness…
The longing and the passion we had for each other…
Love so strong that I cried when you left my side
For even a small amount of time because
I loved you so much

But it’s all water under the bridge….

I remember lying in bed at night..
Just you and I and the darkness
Which enveloped us
I remember you saying that you would always love me
That you would never leave me
That you would never let anyone hurt me
I remember broken promises
Not just yours but mine too
My promises to try harder
Communicate better
Promises to be more loving and affectionate
If only I knew then what I know now maybe we……

But it’s all water under the bridge…..

I remember the final, fateful day in the cousellors office
The day when I fully comprehended what had been happening
Realized what I perhaps could’ve done differently
So much yet so little
That could’ve saved us,
Saved you, saved me
From myself
I remember this day because
It was the day my world crumbled
The day my heart broke
The day I realized that I had lost
The only woman I had ever truly loved
And the woman I will never stop loving
The woman I promised to love forever
The woman whose love I so selfishly
Took for granted
And I realized I had taken the hard road
Yet again

But it’s all water under the bridge….

Now all that I have left
Is a broken heart
And a heart that bleeds for two very young children
Who are not going to understand
Why their world is yet again being turned upside down
Just when they thought they were settling in
I have a woman, a friend
No longer a lover
Who promises she will never let me crash
A woman who I can never really even
Be sure will still be around tomorrow
Because you never really know what life brings you
A woman I can no longer lean on
Because it
Is no longer my right to do so
A woman who I now have to let go of
Who, through my tears and my regret
And my heartache
I have to set free

But it’s all water…under the bridge.

Post Tue Oct 17, 2006 2:55 pm 
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Eiregirl



Joined: 21 Jul 2005
Posts: 10230
Location: Chasing a pink bunny


Sparlky,

You already have read my disclaimer so we will get to it...

This is a wonderful write and one that if you have not shown her already...you should.

Some of the lines seemed a little long and could probably be broken down into two shorter lines but other than that it is a very good heartfelt emotional write.

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Post Tue Oct 17, 2006 10:48 pm 
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sparklyindigo



Joined: 08 Oct 2006
Posts: 32
thanks for the feedback

thank you...and i did show her when i originally wrote it..quite a while ago now....didn't seem to matter to her..but..such is life...again..thanks.

sparkly

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