Joined: 12 Apr 2006
Posts: 47
Location: north augusta , south carolina
US AGAIN
Us Again
I've done you wrong I'm sorry,
the pains still there I know.
The hurt out weighs the love I'm sure,
blame you for the hate I don't.
The clocks still turning,
to bad it won't turn back.
My mind wants to move forward,
while your hearts still in the past.
Forgive me I wish you could,
forget It I know you can't.
Love me I wish you would,
or Is It you loved me too much before.
Now we are dangling here,
within a past not yet forgotten.
The future waits ahead,
take my hand lets move forward-
and try this once again.
I need a chance to show you,
open up your heart you'll see.
That through the mistakes I've made,
I've grown into who you need me to be.
My love Is stronger than ever,
a love for you and you alone.
No one can take your place,
with you my heart has found a home.
Faithfull, trustworthy, truthful- not me,
at least not before as from what you have seen.
All this and more Is who I am now,
I just need the chance to prove my love to you somehow.
I'm not asking you to forget,
just to take this leap.
Return your heart where It belongs,
and take this walk with me.
Ahead lies our happiness,
for us alone to share.
You are my one devotion,
In which no one compares.
I love you more than I can ever express,
I'm sorry I ever hurt you and the pain I caused In the process.
I need you to look and see,
that your the only one for me.
Please give me back your heart,
start once again.
For your my everything,
baby let's be us again.
_________________ Dont base what you want on appearance dig deeper and connect to a lasting image, for looks may fade but the soul last forever.
Wed Apr 12, 2006 5:10 am
lemons
Joined: 12 Feb 2006
Posts: 964
Location: here ... with her <3
Awww, it sounds like you are going through a hard time right now ....... I hope writing provides some release for you ......
another wonderful write ....... take care, k? _________________
"No smile is more beautiful than one that has struggled through the tears"
~Unknown
Wed Apr 12, 2006 5:13 am
apoetsreality
Joined: 12 Apr 2006
Posts: 47
Location: north augusta , south carolina
writting is always a release for me this poem right here is actually a old poem of mine just thought I would share it with the board.....thanks for your reply and you take care as well. _________________ Dont base what you want on appearance dig deeper and connect to a lasting image, for looks may fade but the soul last forever.
Wed Apr 12, 2006 5:16 am
ghost
Joined: 06 Nov 2005
Posts: 2828
Location: MIA
reality, i really hope she finds forgiveness in her heart. sometimes it can take a long time for the hurt to heal.
take care, as mello said.
regards
ghost
ps if you would like technical help with your poems, let me know by private message. you can also post your poems in the Emotional section above. _________________
MIA
Wed Apr 12, 2006 5:18 am
apoetsreality
Joined: 12 Apr 2006
Posts: 47
Location: north augusta , south carolina
thanks so much ghost and yes i have posted one in the emotinal section as well called just when. _________________ Dont base what you want on appearance dig deeper and connect to a lasting image, for looks may fade but the soul last forever.
Wed Apr 12, 2006 5:20 am
Xalia1 Moderators
Joined: 05 May 2004
Posts: 3702
Location: In love
Reality,
This was a beautiful write.
I understand how you must be feeling, or at least how you felt when you wrote this. It's kind of like you took the things I've been thinking and trying to say lately and laid it out perfectly. Thank you for sharing this.
Peace to you hun.
Hugs,
Xalia _________________ Nobody said life would be easy...They just promised it would be worth it.
~♥♥~
~The words fail me.. because what I feel for you is beyond description...~
Thu Apr 13, 2006 4:32 am
apoetsreality
Joined: 12 Apr 2006
Posts: 47
Location: north augusta , south carolina
Glad you could connect with the poem xalia........everyone has been there a time or two.... _________________ Dont base what you want on appearance dig deeper and connect to a lasting image, for looks may fade but the soul last forever.
Thu Apr 13, 2006 5:02 am
scruples
Joined: 28 Jan 2007
Posts: 151
Location: Long Island, NY
Us Again
You have a romantic charm, but I can't pinpoint where.
You are earnest in this poem, like on a mission to get this
girl back into your life. I know how that feels..I messed up
real badly in a relationship that went sour all because i had a big fat mouth.
..so I relate.
However, you need to work on some rhyme scheme techniques.
Try mapping out a page let's say aba cdc aa bb cc dd or something like that. It will provoke the words to have formation and carry more meaning.
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