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NIC



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WARNING: Some may find this disturbing [F]


CONNOISSEUR

This trains movement I can feel
as the blood courses through my veins
I am awakened.
I feel real.

Shadowed beneath myself I was
Until she opened up and let me in
Her vicious taste
Her insidious grin
She quiets down the noise
That lingers inside my head.
The thrust of her presence
Comforts me with my blood instead!

Powerful you are
My fucking blade
My fucking scar
There are times
Too many times
I should have taken control
Raising my hand
When she pushes in
and continues to pull

Taking my breathe.
Stealing my blood
As she pierces my skin.
She is my gift
My sweet little sin

Jagged edges appear
The deeper she thrusts
Releasing my every fear
I’m bound in this cold sweat
With each stroke she takes
My precious Hideaway
My precious Whore.

My heart no longer aches
Cause she’ll always forsake
Leaving my mind open
Bleeding as I wake!

Her deepness bellows
It sometimes hides
My beautiful demon
She made me feel alive
Her purpose to pierce my skin
made me feel whole again

With so much to hide
The blood she takes
The blood of my unhappy wake
I can feel her quiver
She makes me fucking shake

Alive she makes me feel
with every drip
I have nothing left to conceal
I am now open and sore
I won’t give up
I refuse to give in
I embellish on feeling raw!


Powerful you are
My fucking blade
My fucking scar
There are times
Too many times
I should have taken control
Raising my hand
When she pushes in
and continues to pull

Let it go
I will let her go
Her job is done
Opening up
My fucked up little soul

I shall decrease you
as I continue to release you
Now I feel complete
So Thank You




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Post Wed Apr 25, 2007 5:44 pm 
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Eiregirl



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NIC

Overall this is a wonderfully written poem about cutting.

I only see one little mistake...

The shhh word in the second stanza...might want to take a look at it.

Very well done

Hugs,
Eiregirl Arrow
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Post Wed Apr 25, 2007 7:44 pm 
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NIC



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Why thanks darlin
I always have many Typo's!

And as far as Stanza's go
I follow no poetry rules

I just write......and no more than 30 seconds to
a minute later I end up with these.
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Post Wed Apr 25, 2007 8:35 pm 
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NIC



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Oops double post
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You are welcome...twice over Laughing

Hugs,
Eiregirl Wink
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A very dark poem indeed, well written. Exclamation

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Post Thu Apr 26, 2007 2:44 pm 
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NIC



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Yeah quite Dark
Glad there wasn't any
responses claiming offense
Smile
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Post Thu Apr 26, 2007 5:37 pm 
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NIC -
That was interesting...
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Post Tue May 15, 2007 10:57 am 
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Post Tue May 15, 2007 1:39 pm 
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Nic,

Very powerful.
The descriptions in this are unique and accurate.
Thanks for sharing this.

(((((((((Nic))))))))))))))

Hugs,
Xalia
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speechless

As the mother of a 16 yo daughter who was once a cutter (i found out in november after she lost her dad in oct that she was cutting)...i felt this from the bottom of my heart....now i must ask..is that what it really feels like..to be driven to do that..not criticizing or judging....trying to understand so i can help my own child if by chance she should go back to cutting.. studies have shown that once a person cuts, it can happen again and often does... ..if you dont feel comfortable in replying here PLEASE pm me so i can try to get a better understanding of this. Her therapist has not been much help in the explanation department. ...very well written....you touched not only my heart but my soul with this one... Exclamation thank you for sharing this..sending you many hugs.... Arrow (naughty)
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Post Sat May 26, 2007 11:22 am 
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NIC

Thank you for sharing this with us in the darkside. A very powerful write that I hope will help you heal. As others have said there are many who can relate to this poem.

This is type of poetry along with the vamp/goth poetry are why I requested a special forum. Sometimes some of our poetry needs its own place to be released in the dark side.

Thank you for sharing

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Post Wed Jun 06, 2007 9:29 pm 
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Nic

Very descriptive, and long but it kept my attention....so it didn't bother me... I usually like to say I enjoyed reading this, which I did but I'm not quite sure if that is the way to put it, since it is about someone in pain that they would hurt themselves, but anyway I think you know what I mean... Thanks so much for sharing this write. Smile CJ
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There is definitely something so captivating about this poem Nic ... I like it a lot... Deep and powerful ... Hugs Nila xx Very Happy
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Tajzna



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I felt every drop of blood hit the floor..pooled and indiscriminate..

Is this what persists of my heart?
to make me bleed?
vengence
keeps ill my veins
my barrow flows deep with deceipt
i'm dirtied and uglied
never to be clean
where do you dangle?
I never see you
though you step heavy on my heart
to make me feel powerless
like a child


reading you made me write this in thirty seconds..i am sending it before i read it again for some reason..although our stories may differ, our pain remains the same..i want you to know that i love you my sister, woman, part of me, part of us all..you are never alone..

Tajzna

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