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If You're Going To Shoot, Shoot For Gold, A poem (F)

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Joined: 23 Mar 2007
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Location: las vegas, nv
If You're Going To Shoot, Shoot For Gold, A poem (F)

if you are going to shoot girl,
shoot for gold.
why settle for
second place?

i don't think that
second ever
really suited you.

You are to out-there,
non-conformist,
publicly broken,
and bruised.

so,
if you are going to shoot,
shoot for gold.


i used to see you as
beautiful,
although so
objective,
beauty
is not in the eyes
of the beholder,
but in the dry eyes
of social acceptance.
but i used
to think you
were beautiful.

sometimes in secret,
i still do
but your gold
is chippin'
and i can see underneath you now
to your true skin,
which is fools gold,

that sort of
gray-green yellow,
that they could sell
you as a kid
for 50 cents

but I'm not buyin',
bitin',
i know better now,

so if you are going to shoot girl,
shoot for gold,
because second best
never really suited you


So, if you are going to shoot,
shoot for gold.

(Real gold)

Yeah if you're
going to shoot girl,
shoot for gold.

Because second best never
really suited you,
but can you find a way
to suit yourself?


(Fools gold)

(Yeah girl,


you're only


fools gold




now!)
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Post Fri Mar 23, 2007 3:01 am 
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SharayaKai



Joined: 13 Feb 2007
Posts: 245
Location: Mountains of Utah


Nicely written. I'm surprised noone's replied before me.

It almost sounds like a song, the way one stanza repeats. If so, I'd love to hear the music.

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