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... _________________ “It would be a pity of lesbians and gay men retreated into the same kind of cultural separatism. " - Jeanette Winterson
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Mon Nov 30, 2009 1:58 am
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B,
I think I would have to hear you read this to get the meter of the last three lines. That said, I love the imagery, particularly of "glow-fire gems".
I feel like I've been there--and surely I've been somewhere similar on any given Sabbat--but there's also something universal about this scene ... something almost ancient, calling.
Very nicely done.
~Eilidh
Sun Jan 10, 2010 7:01 pm
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Sun Feb 07, 2010 6:45 am
Beth
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Bde,
I read this one before and I am sorry I didn't comment the first time. I read it again tonight and what I see is a very great use of simile and metaphor to describe the fiercely intense heat of fire and love's ecstasy
this fire is the intense burning and longing for the other and the other is like the water for the fire containing its soothing rushing eruption into lights that dance around like flames.....
Beth _________________ StarGazer
Tue Mar 02, 2010 9:27 pm
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