Joined: 17 Dec 2005
Posts: 2216
Location: loves land of plenty
Real, love, choice
We have, have we… already… kissed
Without
…, when we
were
Searching amidst the scattered lilac petals
Of our own do~ing and
un~do~ing
We have, have we… already… made love
Without
…, when she was
Revealing her psycho-social schisms
Before she could even ask, K, please?
No sacrifice, just, intuitive perception
We have, have we… already… known
Without
…, when
I
was
Tilting towards the omni-directional, to a…void
Questions, coursing within our shared minds eye
Trying without trying to link us
We are part of the original source
We do, do we… simply continue to spiral
As we are veiled and unveiled to comprehend
Love Is a, our only, Real Choice
Wed Sep 03, 2008 4:33 pm
Phoenix Moderators
Joined: 27 Jan 2005
Posts: 1664
Location: Tallahassee Florida
Truly a beautiful piece Real. Love is all that really matters.
Phoenix _________________ "A little work won't hurt you bad, but just in case I'm wrong, you'll be smiling when they pronounce you dead." Amanda Marshall 'This could take all night
Mon Sep 08, 2008 4:17 am
smart_cookie
Joined: 12 Aug 2006
Posts: 2310
Location: USA
Well you old softie, you.
*pokes the goo that once was K*
It has a very nice rhythm, and you've used repetition effectively, as you've done before. You've got an ear, an instinct, for that.
This is certainly the only poem I've read which includes the term "omni-directional."
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Mon Sep 15, 2008 11:42 am
fortheloveofagood... Site Admin
Joined: 17 Dec 2005
Posts: 2216
Location: loves land of plenty
Thank you very much ladies...
Kx
Tue Sep 16, 2008 2:29 pm
Eilidh Moderators
Joined: 09 Apr 2005
Posts: 1880
K,
I like the measuredness of this poem. It's as if you've thought out every single detail and are slowly letting each one out, one by one.
Nice work. Keep them coming, chica.
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