Dark as Day as Light is Dark
Together we wonder down the streets of todays dismays, hungers, poor and distraught. Tomorrows darkness covers up or insidious fears, as tomorrow day light uncovers or indiscretions that even we fear.
A rapest, a hooker, a homeless or parking lot gay trick behind a dumpster. A druggy shooting up in a doorway, a businessman out looking for a "Date", The Pimp searching for his unruly Ho, A young adult male searching for his next fix of Meth to shoot up in his car.
All the secrets the night keeps....
As the sun rises... washing our streets clean...
The Banker playing grab ass w/ the secretary for a compromised yet promised raise.
A Mothers Daughter with her own children to raise.. covering the black eyes from the beating of her alcoholic husband that came home at lunch just to celebrate.
The pedifile that lives across the street, that watches the neighborhood kids every Friday & Saturday Evenings.
The physicaly, verbaly abusive father that shames, controls and beats his teen boy for not being #1 in his high school sports, for letting the father down for not living up to his own dreams that he threw away, as did every father before him from a trilogy of alcoholic and physical abusers.
The Day light washes the darkness away.
The Darkness hides the shames of life that we try to masquerade .
Daylight then covets the family disfunctionalities that every one is to afraid to speak up and say.
Day is night as night is to day.. Pain is to pain no matter what time of day.
A pain in the night time is to a pain in the brightest of the middle of the day that can & will never get washed away clean unless we step out from behind our fears that keep us there
Sun May 13, 2007 6:33 am
luvinmomofone1
Joined: 26 Oct 2007
Posts: 40
Location: oklahoma usa
i can understand the sentiments around your poem . i think it sounded nice but to me the flow was a little off...it was right on in the point of the matter but the flow of the verse seemed off to me..i couldnt tell you how tho. _________________ ~welcome to my world! grab a cuppa and have a seat~/
Sun Oct 28, 2007 2:25 pm
awnidea
Joined: 13 Oct 2007
Posts: 40
Location: 3rd planet from our Sun
quote:Originally posted by luvinmomofone1:
i can understand the sentiments around your poem . i think it sounded nice but to me the flow was a little off...it was right on in the point of the matter but the flow of the verse seemed off to me..i couldnt tell you how tho.
that is probably because, it is not verse as such and rather a personal
essay
(see title of Board), of inner sensibilities
my truth
awnidea _________________ " ... 'what distinguishes the men from the boys, is the size of their toys' ... what distinguishes women from girls, is the size of their decisions ... " - Noetis
Sun Oct 28, 2007 3:58 pm
luvinmomofone1
Joined: 26 Oct 2007
Posts: 40
Location: oklahoma usa
cool i am sorry ..did not mean to offend...it was a great poem and i really did like it! i dont have a high school education..i do have a ged. i cannot do math not even in high school. i have a learing disabilty where i know things in my head but cannot put them to use..dont ask me what its called. alot of times i say the wrong things meaning something tottaly differnt that what i said. i realize most you you have degrees and/ or are in college at this time ...i will say time and time again i feel out of my league here but i wll not be intimidated by my ineptitude. i will comment when i feel i must but if it dont come out right please dont take offense..my writing skills are barbaric!! _________________ ~welcome to my world! grab a cuppa and have a seat~/
Sun Oct 28, 2007 9:16 pm
awnidea
Joined: 13 Oct 2007
Posts: 40
Location: 3rd planet from our Sun
cool
it's a refreshing contemplation to have human beings' aspect, that have not been "infected" by the "systematic practices".
thank you for your generocity to share, luvinmomofone1
my truth
awnidea _________________ " ... 'what distinguishes the men from the boys, is the size of their toys' ... what distinguishes women from girls, is the size of their decisions ... " - Noetis
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